My video is in extremely rough form right now. I wanted more people in the video but people were busy and the weather this week hasn’t been very helpful. It has to be done outside but it won’t work in the rain. The acting is also pretty bad at the moment and the script needs a bit of work. To me, this was a practice on what to do and how to do it. I don’t have all of the components mostly because I’m still trying to work out how to incorporate text and sounds. I’ve never done film editing before and as always I’m having a rough time with new technology. It took me 2 hours to even upload the videos into iMovie. It is very similar to my storyboard though which I’m happy about, minus the extra characters.
The purpose is to inspire people to participate in the Red Sand Project, which is an activist artwork to raise awareness for human trafficking. The idea is to put red sand in sidewalk cracks and then take a photo of it and post the picture to social media using the hashtag #redsandproject. That is the text I want to incorporate once I figure out how, in one of the final shots and at the bottom of the screen. The audience is primarily college students right now, especially at Miami. I don’t have any copyright concerns at the moment. I am still trying to figure out what song to use though.
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• Before reading the accompanying blog post, watch the video draft in its entirety. Then, write out a brief explanation of the project’s purpose/point/message as you (the viewer) are able to understand it just from watching/listening. What is the video trying to get you (the viewer) to do? Is the message/purpose clear, or is it confusing in any way? What, if anything, could make the message clearer (e.g., clearer framing via on-screen text or audio)?
I think the purpose of the video is to tell people about how they can raise awareness of human sex trafficking by doing something like the ice bucket challenege but with red sand and posting it to social media. The video is trying to get the video to part take in the challenge. I understood what the message was trying to get across could be clearer. I’m sure it will be in the final draft of the video.
• How well do you, as the viewer, think the various multimodal elements (e.g., moving video, still images, voices, written text, music, ambient sound/sound effects, silence) of the project work together to create the message? What revisions/additions do you suggest?
I think the muitmodal elements work well with this video. I liked how she showed herself doing the challenge and posting it to social media. The sound was good quality.
• Does the video present enough facts/information to effectively make its argument? If not, what would you suggest adding?
It does not at the moment present any facts but in the blog not it said she was not yet finished and had more to add. More facts about human sex trafficking.
• How effective are the technical aspects of the draft (shot-to-shot editing of video, clarity/fidelity of spoken voices, legibility of on-screen text, etc.)? What would you suggest working on in this area?
The technical apsects are good. I liked the shot of her posting the photo to social media. I liked the different angles she used to shot her video.
• Do you detect any possible copyright or ethical concerns in the video (e.g., unauthorized use of copyrighted material, footage of people that may require their permission for sharing, “faked” footage in a place where a viewer would reasonably expect real footage, etc.)? If so, what are the concerns, and how would you suggest negotiating/resolving these issues?
I do not detect any copy right issues.
• What suggestions do you have that could help the video stand out more effectively from the huge number of advocacy videos out there? (And/or: what is the video already doing to help it stand out?)
Go into more explanation about the challenge and human sex trafficking.
• How helpful is the accompanying blog note at providing useful contextual and background information on the project?
The blog note is very helpful in providing useful contextual and background information on the project. It shows tells you what the video is supposed to be about and the work that still needs to be done on the video.
• What other revision suggestions or constructive comments/questions, if any, do you have for the rhetor?
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